家事分工
你認為家裡生活環境的維持應該是誰的責任?請寫一篇短文說明你的看法。文分兩段，第一段說明你對家事該如何分工的看法及理由，第二段舉例說明你家中家事分工的情形，並描述你自己做家事的經驗及感想。
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Keeping a home clean and comfortable is a shared responsibility that every family member should take seriously. Rather than leaving all the housework to one person — usually a parent — each member ought to contribute according to their ability. Not only does fair division of chores prevent burnout and resentment, but it also teaches younger members the value of self-discipline and cooperation. When everyone pitches in, the household runs more smoothly and family bonds are naturally strengthened. In my family, the chores are divided quite practically. My parents handle the heavier tasks: my father takes out the trash and fixes things around the house, while my mother does the grocery shopping and cooking. My sister and I are responsible for the lighter but equally important jobs — she vacuums the living room every weekend, and I wash the dishes after dinner each night. I still remember the first time I did the dishes alone. The water was too hot, the soap kept slipping, and the pile seemed never-ending. Yet finishing that sink full of plates gave me a quiet sense of accomplishment that no video game ever could. Had I never been assigned these small duties, I might have grown up taking my parents' efforts entirely for granted. Doing chores has taught me that a warm home is not simply given — it is made, together, every single day.
技巧說明（5）
使用「Not only … but also …」相關連接詞，並搭配「Not only」置於句首所引發的「倒裝語序」（助動詞 does 提前），一次展現兩個高分句型。這個句型能讓論點從「一個好處」自然延伸到「第二個好處」，論證更有層次。學生只要記住公式：Not only + 助動詞 + 主詞 + 動詞 …, but it also + V…，就能直接套用在說明理由的段落中。
此句雖是副詞子句，但緊接在前句的論點之後，形成「條件→結果」的清晰邏輯。更值得注意的是後半句同時使用主動（runs）與被動（are strengthened）的平行結構，讓句子讀來有節奏感。學生可以練習用「When / Once / If + 條件子句，主句呈現正面結果」的格式來收束論點段落。
第二段用「while」對比父母的分工，再用破折號（em dash）引出子女的分工，整體呈現「父—母—姐—我」四人平行羅列的結構。這種對稱式敘述讓分工情形一目瞭然，閱卷老師能迅速掌握文章內容。學生寫「分工說明」類題目時，可學習用 while / whereas 製造對比，再以破折號補充細節，避免一句一句流水帳式描述。
這是「If I had never been assigned … → I might have grown up …」的假設語氣倒裝省略 if 的寫法。將 if 省略後，助動詞 Had 提至句首，語氣更正式、更有文學感，是學測作文中極具鑑別度的句型。學生只需記住：「Had + 主詞 + 過去分詞 …, 主詞 + would / might / could + have + 過去分詞 …」即可套用，特別適合用在「反思感想」段落，製造畫龍點睛的效果。
此處用三個短句（water too hot / soap slipping / pile never-ending）堆疊洗碗的真實困難感，然後用「Yet」急轉直下帶出成就感，情緒對比強烈。「a quiet sense of accomplishment」中的 quiet 是精準用字——不是大喜若狂，而是一種內斂的滿足，非常符合做完日常家事的真實心情。學生寫個人經驗時，可以學習用「三個感官細節 → 轉折 → 情感收結」的公式，讓敘述生動而不空泛。
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