上課該不該收手機
近年來，不少學校規定學生上課期間必須把手機集中保管，下課或放學後才能取回，學生對此看法不一。請以此為主題，寫一篇英文作文，文分兩段。第一段說明學校訂定這項規定的原因，以及你觀察到同學們對這項規定的反應；第二段說明你是否贊成這項規定並解釋理由，再提出一個你認為更合理的校園手機使用方式。
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這是同一題的頂標等級範文，標色的地方是值得學起來的進階文法句型或用字。
In recent years, many schools have adopted a policy requiring students to hand in their cell phones at the beginning of the school day, only returning them after classes or school ends. The main reason behind this rule is that administrators believe phones distract students from their studies and, worse, encourage cheating during exams. Having witnessed countless classmates sneaking glances at group chats under their desks, I can see why teachers feel this measure is necessary. That said, reactions among students are far from unanimous. While some admit that being separated from their phones actually helps them concentrate better, others complain bitterly, arguing that they should have the right to manage their own devices and that emergencies—such as a sudden family matter—might arise when they desperately need to reach someone. It is this tension between academic focus and personal autonomy that fuels ongoing debate on campus. As for my own stance, I am only partially in favor of this policy. On one hand, I understand its intention to minimize distraction; on the other hand, collecting all phones indiscriminately seems like an overly rigid, one-size-fits-all solution that fails to address individual needs. Were the rule more flexible, it would surely be easier for students to accept. Therefore, instead of a blanket ban, I propose a system in which phones are allowed to remain with students but must be switched to silent mode and placed in a designated pouch on each desk during class, visible to teachers yet still within reach. This way, should a true emergency occur, students could still be contacted immediately, while the temptation to check social media would be significantly reduced simply by having the phone out of hand. Not only would such a compromise respect students' sense of responsibility, but it would also preserve the order that teachers originally sought to maintain. In my opinion, trust and flexibility, rather than strict confiscation, are what truly cultivate self-discipline in the long run.
技巧說明（5）
這是「分詞構句」的經典用法：當兩個子句主詞相同時，可以把其中一個子句簡化成分詞片語，放在句首，使句子更精簡緊湊、避免重複主詞。這裡原本的完整句子應該是「Because I have witnessed countless classmates sneaking glances at group chats under their desks, I can see why...」，把「Because I have witnessed」簡化成「Having witnessed」（完成式分詞，表示動作發生在主要子句之前），文句立刻變得更流暢有層次，也展現你能掌握時態先後關係，而不是只會用簡單的 because 子句。學生可以套用在任何需要先敘述原因再講結果的句子上，例如寫環保作文時可以說「Having seen the plastic waste piling up on the beach, I realized how urgent the problem truly is.」
這句是「與現在事實相反的假設語氣」（If the rule were more flexible, it would be easier...），但省略了 if，並將 were 提到主詞前面形成倒裝，這是正式書面英文中常見且高級的寫法，閱卷者看到會立刻覺得你文法底子紮實。一般學生只會寫「If the rule were more flexible」，但用倒裝版本「Were the rule more flexible」更簡潔有力，也展現你熟悉假設語氣的進階變化（was/were 倒裝僅限於 if 子句用 were 時）。套用技巧：在任何需要寫「如果...就會...」的假設句時，都可以嘗試把 if 拿掉、were 提前，例如「Were more parks built in the city, residents would have more space to relax.」
這是「It is...that...」的強調句型，用來凸顯句子中最重要的訊息，這裡強調的是「this tension」這個主詞。比起平鋪直敘地寫「This tension fuels ongoing debate on campus.」，用強調句型能讓語氣更有力道，同時也幫段落做一個漂亮的小結，讓讀者注意到作者想強調的核心概念。學生在結論句或想要特別強調某個重點時，都可以套用這個句型，例如寫到環境議題時可以說「It is human greed that lies at the root of environmental destruction.」
當句子以 Not only 開頭時，後面的子句必須採用「助動詞+主詞」的倒裝語序，這是學測作文中很常考、也很能展現文法實力的句型。一般寫法可能是「Such a compromise would not only respect students' sense of responsibility but also preserve the order...」，但把 Not only 移到句首並倒裝，語氣更強烈、更正式，是閱卷老師眼中的加分亮點。學生可以在列舉兩個優點或原因時套用這個句型，例如「Not only does regular exercise improve physical health, but it also boosts mental well-being.」
這裡選用了「indiscriminately」（不加區別地）、「rigid」（僵化的）、「one-size-fits-all」（一體適用、缺乏彈性的，常用來批評政策缺乏彈性）這些精準且地道的詞彙，而不是用簡單籠統的 bad 或 not good。使用這類精確貼切的形容詞和片語，能讓論述更有說服力，也顯示出字彙廣度，是頂標作文與中等作文的重要差異之一。學生可以平時整理一些評論政策、制度時常用的進階詞彙庫，例如 arbitrary（武斷的）、counterproductive（適得其反的）、one-size-fits-all（一體適用的），在議論文中適時使用，例如「A one-size-fits-all curriculum fails to address students' diverse needs.」
範文由 WriteUp 依學測評分規準產生，供練習參考，不是大考中心公布的佳作。