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畢業生前往海外工作意願

根據調查,有越來越多的大學畢業生願意前往海外工作,下表為2014-2016年某大學大四學生,票選心 目中最理想海外工作國家的結果。請寫一篇文章,第一段描述此表所呈現的狀況,第二段說明你心中最 理想的海外工作地點(國家、城市皆可)為何以及原因。

畢業生前往美國:60%(2014)、50%(2015)、15%(2016);畢業生前往中國:10%(2014)、20%(2015)、45%(2016);畢業生前往日本:20%(2014)、20%(2015)、20%(2016);畢業生前往其他國家:10%(2014)、10%(2015)、20%(2016)。

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The graph above illustrates how senior students' preferences for their ideal overseas workplace shifted between 2014 and 2016. The United States, once the most popular choice, saw its share plummet dramatically from 60% in 2014 to a mere 15% in 2016. China, in sharp contrast, experienced a steady rise, climbing from only 10% to 45% over the same period, eventually surpassing the U.S. as the top destination. Meanwhile, Japan's popularity remained constant at 20% throughout the three years, neither gaining nor losing favor. Interest in other countries, though still minor, also doubled from 10% to 20%, suggesting that students' horizons were gradually broadening beyond the traditional top choices. As for me, were I given the chance to work abroad, Japan would be my first choice. Not only is its culture, with its unique blend of tradition and modernity, deeply appealing to me, but its proximity to Taiwan also makes it convenient to visit my family whenever I like. Furthermore, having studied Japanese for three years, I would relish the opportunity to put my language skills to practical use in a real working environment. Tokyo, in particular, with its countless career opportunities in technology and design, strikes me as the perfect place to kick-start my professional life.

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分詞構句(though 省略主詞的讓步用法)Interest in other countries, though still minor, also doubled from 10% to 20%

這是「though + 形容詞」的省略句型,完整版本應為 though it was still minor,但因主詞 it(代替 interest)與主要子句主詞一致,可以省略主詞與 be 動詞,只留下 though + 形容詞補語,插入句子中間形成一個簡潔的讓步插入語。這樣寫比寫成「Interest in other countries was still minor, but it also doubled from 10% to 20%」更精煉、閱讀起來更流暢,也展現你能靈活運用從屬子句簡化的能力,是閱卷老師眼中的進階句型。學生可以在任何「雖然…但是…」的情境中套用,例如:The plan, though risky, could bring great rewards.

假設語氣倒裝were I given the chance to work abroad, Japan would be my first choice

這句話的完整形式是 If I were given the chance to work abroad, Japan would be my first choice.,屬於與現在事實相反的假設語氣(If + 過去式/were, S + would + 原形動詞)。此處省略了 If,並將 were 移到句首形成倒裝(Were + S + 過去分詞),這是正式書面英文中常見的高階用法,能讓句子讀起來更精緻、更有文采,而不是平鋪直敘地寫「If I had the chance」。學生在表達「如果我有機會…我會…」這類假設情境時,都可以套用這個倒裝句型,例如:Were I to choose a major again, I would study psychology.

倒裝句(Not only 倒裝)Not only is its culture, with its unique blend of tradition and modernity, deeply appealing to me, but its proximity to Taiwan also makes it convenient

當 Not only 放在句首時,後面的子句必須採用部分倒裝,也就是把助動詞或 be 動詞提到主詞之前,此處原本的句子是 Its culture is deeply appealing to me,倒裝後變成 Not only is its culture...appealing to me。這種句型比單純用 and 連接兩個原因(Its culture is appealing and its location is also convenient)更有層次感與強調效果,能清楚凸顯「不僅…而且…」的遞進語氣,是學測作文中常見的加分句型。學生可以在列舉兩項優點或原因時套用,例如:Not only does exercise improve physical health, but it also boosts mental well-being。

分詞構句(完成式分詞表原因)having studied Japanese for three years, I would relish the opportunity

這是分詞構句的用法,原本的完整句子可能是 Because I have studied Japanese for three years, I would relish the opportunity...,由於主詞相同,可以把 because 子句簡化為分詞構句:先判斷動作發生在主要子句動作之前,所以用完成式分詞 Having + p.p.,再省略連接詞與主詞。這樣的寫法比直接用 Because 開頭更簡潔、更具書面語的精緻感,同時展現時間先後的邏輯關係(先學了日文,才能運用)。學生可以在任何想表達「因為做了某事,所以…」的情境中使用,例如:Having practiced the piano for years, she performed flawlessly on stage.

精準用字(strike as + kick-start 片語)strikes me as the perfect place to kick-start my professional life

strike someone as + 名詞/形容詞 是「給某人…的印象、讓某人覺得…」的道地片語,比單純寫 I think Tokyo is a good place 更生動、更有主詞轉換的巧思(用地方當主詞,而不是用「我」當主詞開頭,避免全篇都是 I think / I believe 的單調句型)。而 kick-start 則是精準且生動的詞彙選擇,意指「啟動、開展(事業、計畫)」,比用普通的 start 更有畫面感與專業感。學生在表達個人觀點或規劃未來時,可以善用這類片語動詞替換掉單調的 I think,例如:This internship strikes me as a valuable stepping stone to kick-start my career in marketing.

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