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高中生每天都該運動嗎

課業忙碌時,運動常常是最先被犧牲的事。請以此為主題,寫一篇英文作文,文分兩段。第一段描述你平常的運動習慣,例如做什麼運動、多久一次;第二段說明你是否認為高中生每天都應該運動,並說明理由。

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Exercise has always had an awkward place in my weekly schedule. Between stacks of homework and endless exam preparation, I usually manage to work out only three times a week, mostly playing basketball with classmates after school or jogging around the track near my house. Each session lasts about forty minutes, just enough to leave me sweaty but not so long that I fall behind on my assignments. Occasionally, when a big test looms the next day, even this modest routine is the first thing to go, sacrificed without a second thought so that I can squeeze in extra hours of review. Despite how tempting it is to treat exercise as optional, I firmly believe that high school students should move their bodies every single day, if only for a short while. Were we to exercise daily, not only would our physical health improve, but our academic performance would likely benefit as well, since research consistently shows that physical activity sharpens concentration and relieves the stress that so often accompanies a demanding schedule. Moreover, habits formed now tend to last a lifetime; a student who learns to prioritize even fifteen minutes of stretching or a brisk walk amid a hectic day is far more likely to remain active as an adult than one who treats exercise as disposable. It is this long-term payoff, rather than any immediate convenience, that makes daily exercise worth the sacrifice of a little study time. Therefore, no matter how busy our schedules become, we should never let exercise be the first thing we give up.

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分詞構句(過去分詞作補語)sacrificed without a second thought

這裡的 sacrificed 是過去分詞,用來補充說明前面的「this modest routine」被犧牲的狀態,等於是省略了關係代名詞子句 which is sacrificed without a second thought 的完整版本。文法規則上,當分詞的邏輯主詞與主要子句的主詞一致(或像這裡修飾前面的名詞)時,可以用分詞片語取代冗長的關代子句,使句子更精簡緊湊。比起寫成 "...is the first thing to go, and it is sacrificed without a second thought",用分詞片語可以避免兩個對等子句並列造成的鬆散感,讀起來更有書面語的凝練感。學生可以在描述「某事物被如何對待」時套用這個句型,例如:The old bicycle sat in the garage, forgotten for years。

假設語氣倒裝句(Were we to V)Were we to exercise daily, not only would our physical health improve, but our academic performance would likely benefit as well

這句同時示範了兩個進階文法:一是「Were + S + to V」的假設語氣倒裝,這是 If we were to exercise daily 的倒裝形式,省略 If 並將 were 提到主詞前,屬於正式書面英文中常見的假設語氣倒裝,用來表達一種「尚未發生、帶有推測性」的條件假設。二是句中的 not only...but...as well 平行結構,用來並列兩個假設後會發生的結果。比起平鋪直敘地寫 "If we exercise every day, it will be good for our health and our grades",倒裝假設語氣句型明顯更顯示出寫作者對進階文法的掌握度,也讓語氣更具文學性與說服力。學生可以在議論文中表達「如果我們這樣做會有什麼好處」時套用,例如:Were students to read more, their vocabulary would naturally expand。

強調句型(It is...that...)It is this long-term payoff, rather than any immediate convenience, that makes daily exercise worth the sacrifice of a little study time.

這是標準的 It is...that... 分裂句(cleft sentence),用來強調句子中的某個特定元素,此處強調的是 "this long-term payoff",並搭配 rather than 來對比「長期回報」與「立即的方便」。文法上,強調句的公式是 It is/was + 被強調的部分 + that/who + 剩餘的句子,被強調的部分通常放在句首以吸引讀者注意。比起直接寫 "This long-term payoff makes daily exercise worth it",用強調句型可以讓這個論點在文章的收尾處顯得更有力道、更具結論性,是議論文結尾常用的加分技巧。學生可以在強調某個關鍵原因或結論時套用,例如:It is dedication, not talent, that determines success。

精準進階字彙與片語sharpens concentration and relieves the stress

這裡選用 sharpens(使敏銳)和 relieves(緩解)這兩個動詞,比起單純使用 improve 或 reduce 更加精確且生動,sharpen 常用來形容感官或心智能力的提升,relieve 則是正式用語中表達「舒緩壓力」的慣用搭配詞(collocation),比 make stress less 更道地。學測作文閱卷標準中,精準且多樣化的動詞使用是區分「普通」與「頂標」等級的重要指標之一。學生平時可以建立屬於自己的「進階動詞替換表」,例如把 improve 替換成 enhance/boost/sharpen,把 reduce 替換成 relieve/alleviate/ease,寫作時刻意替換掉最基本的動詞,例如:Regular reading enhances comprehension and alleviates anxiety before exams。

子句間的因果連接詞 sincesince research consistently shows that physical activity sharpens concentration and relieves the stress that so often accompanies a demanding schedule

since 在此作為從屬連接詞,引導原因子句,用來支撐前面提出的論點(運動對課業也有幫助),比起單純用 because 更顯正式與流暢,且 since 常用於學術寫作中承接前文已知或顯而易見的理由。此句同時包裹了一個 that 名詞子句(research shows that...)以及一個關係子句(the stress that so often accompanies...),屬於多層次子句鑲嵌的複雜句,展現出句構的縱深。學生在議論文中提出論點後,可以用 since 來補充具體理由,增加論述的說服力,例如:I believe reading is essential, since it broadens our perspective and improves our writing skills。

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