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最好的朋友最近迷上電玩

你最好的朋友最近迷上電玩,因此常常熬夜,疏忽課業,並受到父母的責罵。你(英文名字必須假設為 Jack 或 Jill)打算寫一封信給他/她(英文名字必須假設為 Ken 或 Barbie),適當地給予勸告。 請注意:必須使用上述的 Jack 或 Jill 在信末署名,不得使用自己的真實中文或英文名字。

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Dear Ken, I hope this letter finds you well. Lately, though, I have been genuinely worried about you. Ever since you got hooked on video games, you have been staying up until the early hours of the morning, letting your grades slip, and drawing your parents' anger — and honestly, watching all of this happen to my best friend breaks my heart. I completely understand the appeal. Video games are exciting, immersive, and a great way to unwind. But ask yourself this: is the temporary thrill worth the damage it is doing to your health, your studies, and your relationship with your family? Sleep deprivation alone can seriously impair your memory and concentration, making it even harder to catch up at school. What I would suggest is setting a firm daily time limit — say, one hour after finishing your homework. That way, you can still enjoy gaming without letting it take over your life. It also might help to talk openly with your parents and show them you are willing to make changes. Small steps like these could go a long way toward rebuilding their trust. Ken, you are one of the most talented people I know. It would be such a waste to let a game stand between you and the future you deserve. I believe in you, and I know you have what it takes to find the right balance. Always here for you, Jack

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分詞構句(伴隨狀況)letting your grades slip, and drawing your parents' anger

①文法規則:分詞構句(participial phrase)可用來表達「伴隨發生的動作或結果」,其主詞必須與主要子句的主詞一致。本句以 'you have been staying up until the early hours of the morning' 為主要動作,後接 'letting your grades slip, and drawing your parents' anger' 兩個現在分詞片語,說明「熬夜」同時帶來的連鎖後果,三個動作共用同一主詞 you,形成緊湊的平行列舉。②加分原因:若改用普通的並列句 'your grades have slipped and your parents have gotten angry',語氣是分散、各自獨立的陳述。使用分詞構句則把三個負面行為串聯成「一個壞習慣引發連鎖反應」的因果感,層次更立體,讀起來也更流暢自然,能展現考生超越基礎的句構掌控能力。③套用方式:只要描述「某人做了一件事,同時也導致/伴隨著另一件事」,就能使用這個結構。例如:'She spent all day on her phone, ignoring her family and ruining her sleep schedule.'(她整天滑手機,忽視家人,也搞壞了睡眠時間。)

修辭性問句(反問句)But ask yourself this: is the temporary thrill worth the damage it is doing to your health, your studies, and your relationship with your family?

①文法規則:修辭性問句(rhetorical question)是一種不期待對方直接回答、而是以問句形式強迫讀者自我反思的寫作技巧。本句以祈使句 'ask yourself this' 引導讀者進入內省狀態,再接一個 yes/no question,問句本身已暗示答案(當然不值得),從而達到勸說效果。②加分原因:相較於直接說 'The temporary thrill is not worth the damage.'(平鋪直敘),用問句讓讀者自己得出結論,說服力更強,也更貼近真實書信中朋友對朋友說話的語氣——不是說教,而是引導。閱卷老師看到這樣的句子,會感受到考生有意識地運用修辭策略,而非只是堆砌詞彙。③套用方式:在勸說或議論段落中,適當插入一個修辭問句可以增強語氣。例如寫有關環保的作文時,可以說:'Ask yourself this: is the convenience of a plastic bag worth the hundreds of years it takes to decompose?'(問問自己:一個塑膠袋帶來的方便,值得它需要數百年才能分解嗎?)

假設語氣/條件句(具體建議句型)What I would suggest is setting a firm daily time limit — say, one hour after finishing your homework.

①文法規則:'What I would suggest is + V-ing' 是一個結合「名詞子句作主詞」與「助動詞 would 表委婉語氣」的進階句型。'What I would suggest' 是 wh- 名詞子句擔任主詞,'is setting...' 是主詞補語。用 would 而非直接說 'I suggest that...' 能軟化語氣,在書信寫作中尤其適合——既有效提出建議,又不顯得強硬或命令式。②加分原因:普通寫法是 'You should set a time limit.',語氣直接但生硬,用在勸告朋友的書信中顯得欠缺體貼。'What I would suggest is...' 這個句型讓語氣更禮貌、更像真實的朋友對話,同時在句構上也展示了名詞子句和 what 引導的分裂句(pseudo-cleft)運用能力,是閱卷老師喜歡看到的精緻句型。③套用方式:這個句型可以廣泛用於任何需要「提出建議」的寫作情境。例如寫給學弟妹的建議信:'What I would suggest is joining a few clubs in your first semester, so you can make friends more easily.'(我會建議你在第一學期加入幾個社團,這樣比較容易交到朋友。)

強調句/It is … that … 的變體與精準副詞Sleep deprivation alone can seriously impair your memory and concentration, making it even harder to catch up at school.

①文法規則:本句有兩個值得拆解的技巧。第一,副詞 'alone'(單單、光是)後置於名詞 'Sleep deprivation' 之後,作強調用途,等同於 'Even sleep deprivation by itself...',比在句首加 'Even' 更簡潔有力。第二,句尾的 'making it even harder to catch up at school' 是分詞構句表示「結果」,'it' 是形式受詞,真正的受詞是後面的不定詞片語 'to catch up at school',這是 'make it + 形容詞 + to V' 的進階句型。②加分原因:整句把「睡眠不足」→「記憶力與專注力受損」→「更難追上課業」的邏輯鏈條壓縮在一個句子裡,資訊密度高而不雜亂。'impair'(損害)比 'hurt' 或 'affect' 更精準學術,'concentration' 比 'focus' 更正式,這些用字選擇都能讓文章品質提升一個層次。③套用方式:'alone' 作強調後置副詞的用法可以套用在許多說明危害的段落。例如:'Air pollution alone is responsible for millions of deaths each year, making it one of the most pressing issues of our time.'(光是空氣污染每年就造成數百萬人死亡,使它成為當今最迫切的問題之一。)

感嘆句與情感收尾(書信語氣)It would be such a waste to let a game stand between you and the future you deserve.

①文法規則:'It would be + 形容詞 + to V' 是假設語氣(虛擬條件)的應用,暗含「如果你繼續這樣下去,將會是一種浪費」的未說出口的條件。'such a waste' 比 'very wasteful' 更口語化且情感濃度更高,'such + a/an + 名詞' 是英文中表達強烈感嘆的固定結構。'the future you deserve' 中,'you deserve' 是關係子句修飾 'future',省略了關係代名詞 'that',語言更流暢。②加分原因:書信結尾需要「有溫度」,這句話既有邏輯說服力(指出浪費才能的後果),又帶有情感關懷('the future you deserve' 暗示「你值得更好的」),比平淡的 'Please stop playing games.' 更能打動讀者,也更符合真實書信的情感功能。閱卷老師在評量「內容」與「組織」這兩個向度時,有感染力的結尾往往能拉高整體印象分。③套用方式:這個句型適合用在任何需要「以情感收尾」的書信或議論作文。例如:'It would be such a shame to give up on your dream just because the road gets a little tough.'(只因為路途稍微艱難就放棄夢想,將會是多麼可惜的一件事。)

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