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Last Sunday, my family decided to visit a famous scenic spot. Humming a cheerful tune, my father loaded the suitcase into the trunk while my mother and I stood by the car, looking forward to the trip with excitement. Unfortunately, as soon as we got on the road, we found ourselves trapped in heavy traffic. Surrounded by countless vehicles, our car crawled forward inch by inch. My father gripped the steering wheel nervously, and I could not help wondering whether we would ever arrive. After what seemed like an eternity, we finally reached the entrance of the attraction, only to be greeted by a massive crowd. Not only were there people as far as the eye could see, but the line barely seemed to be moving at all. Standing at the very end of the queue, my parents exchanged a look of disbelief, while I, utterly disappointed, almost burst into tears. Just when we were wondering whether to give up, my father suggested that we visit a nearby, less crowded park instead. To our surprise, the park turned out to be a hidden gem, offering a peaceful lake and blooming flowers. In the end, what had begun as a frustrating morning turned into one of the most memorable family outings we had ever had.
技巧說明（6）
這是「分詞構句」的用法：當兩個子句主詞相同、動作同時發生時，可以把其中一個子句的動詞改成現在分詞（Ving），放在句首，省略主詞與連接詞，讓句子更精簡流暢。原本可能寫成「My father hummed a cheerful tune and loaded the suitcase into the trunk.」，用分詞構句後語氣更連貫、更有畫面感，也展現句構變化的能力，是閱卷老師喜歡看到的進階技巧。學生可以在描述人物同時做兩件事時套用，例如：「Smiling brightly, she opened the door to greet her guests.」
此句同樣使用分詞構句，但這裡用的是「過去分詞」Surrounded（被動意義），表示「我們的車被無數車輛包圍」。因為主詞「our car」是被動承受包圍的一方，所以要用過去分詞而非現在分詞，這是分詞構句中主動與被動的重要文法區分。比起平鋪直敘的「Our car was surrounded by countless vehicles and crawled forward.」，這種寫法更精簡且有畫面張力。學生可以套用在描述人或物處於某種狀態時，例如：「Exhausted by the long journey, the travelers finally fell asleep.」
當「not only」放在句首時，後面的子句必須採用倒裝語序，也就是把助動詞或be動詞提到主詞前面，此處是「were there people」。這種倒裝句型能讓句子語氣更強烈、更正式，是學測作文中常見的加分句型，能展現學生對於特殊句型的掌握度。相較於平鋪直敘的「There were not only people as far as the eye could see, but the line also barely seemed to be moving.」，倒裝版本更具文學性與節奏感。學生可以在想強調兩件同時存在的負面或正面狀況時使用，例如：「Not only did it rain heavily, but the wind also grew stronger.」
「only to + 原形動詞」是一個常用於表達「結果出乎意料、令人失望」的句型，通常接在一個表示努力或期待的動作之後，強調「辛苦之後卻得到令人沮喪的結果」。這比單純寫「we reached the entrance and saw a massive crowd」更能傳達出情緒的落差與諷刺意味，增加故事的戲劇張力。學生可以廣泛運用在任何「努力後卻換來失望結果」的情境，例如：「She studied all night, only to fail the test.」
此句包含兩個文法重點：一是「cannot help + Ving」表示「忍不住做某事」，二是「wondering whether + 子句」為間接問句，須用「whether/if + 主詞 + 動詞」的直述語序，而非疑問句語序（不能說whether would we arrive）。這樣的句型能自然地表達內心的猶豫與不安，比直接寫「I was worried. Would we arrive?」更顯細膩且符合書面語的正式度。學生可以套用在描寫角色內心糾結時，例如：「He couldn't help wondering whether he had made the right decision.」
此句使用「what」引導的名詞子句作主詞，將「a frustrating morning turning into a memorable outing」的對比濃縮成一個主詞子句，搭配過去完成式had begun與had ever had，清楚呈現時間先後與情感轉折，是總結故事、呼應開頭的經典寫法。比起簡單寫「The morning was frustrating, but in the end it became a memorable outing.」，這種句型更具文學性與邏輯層次感，常用於文章結尾點題。學生可以在任何「先苦後甘」的故事結尾套用，例如：「What had seemed like a disaster turned out to be a blessing in disguise.」
範文由 WriteUp 依學測評分規準產生，供練習參考，不是大考中心公布的佳作。