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下圖為遊客到訪某場所的新聞畫面。你認為圖中呈現的是什麼景象?你對這個景象有什麼感想?請根據此圖片,寫一篇英文作文。文分兩段,第一段描述圖片的內容,包括其中人、事、物以及發生的事情;第二段則以遊客或場所主人的立場,表達你對這件事情的看法。

圖片中有許多遊客穿梭於盛開花朵的花園中,花園立了一個清楚的告示:「歡迎賞花拍照,但請勿進入踐踏,謝謝合作!」部分遊客未遵守規則,走進花田,跨越並踐踏花朵,只為了擺姿勢拍漂亮的照片。

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這是同一題的頂標等級範文,標色的地方是值得學起來的進階文法句型或用字。

In the photo, a dazzling field of pink and white flowers stretches across the countryside, attracting a crowd of visitors eager to capture the beauty of spring. Near the entrance stands a wooden sign that reads, "Welcome to enjoy and photograph the flowers, but please do not step into the field. Thank you for your cooperation!" Despite this clear request, several tourists have ignored the warning altogether. A young woman in a blue dress, for instance, has wandered deep into the flower bed, crushing the delicate blossoms beneath her feet simply to pose for a prettier picture. Behind her, other visitors follow suit, treating the flowers as nothing more than a backdrop for their social media photos. Were I the owner of this garden, I would feel both proud and heartbroken at the same time. Proud, because the flowers I have carefully cultivated are admired by so many; heartbroken, because that same beauty is being destroyed by the very people who claim to appreciate it. It is ironic that in the pursuit of a perfect photo, these visitors trample the real beauty in front of them. I believe that true appreciation of nature lies not in possessing a flawless image, but in respecting what allows that beauty to exist in the first place. A single sign cannot protect a garden; only a shared sense of responsibility can.

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分詞構句attracting a crowd of visitors eager to capture the beauty of spring

這是典型的「分詞構句」,用現在分詞 attracting 取代 and it attracts... 這種對等子句的寫法,讓句子從兩個獨立句子濃縮成一個主句加上附加說明,閱讀起來更緊湊流暢。文法規則是:當分詞的動作主詞與主要子句主詞相同時,可以把其中一個動詞改成現在分詞(主動)或過去分詞(被動),省略連接詞與重複主詞。比起寫成「A field of flowers stretches across the countryside. It attracts a crowd of visitors.」,使用分詞構句能避免句子零碎、增加句子的層次感,是閱卷老師眼中「句型有變化」的重要指標。學生在描述圖片時,若某個動作是伴隨主要事件自然發生的結果,就可以用這個句型,例如:「The boy ran across the street, ignoring the traffic light.」

假設語氣Were I the owner of this garden, I would feel both proud and heartbroken at the same time.

這是與現在事實相反的假設語氣(第二條件句)的倒裝形式,原本的句型是 If I were the owner of this garden, I would feel...,但為了讓句子更精鍊、更具書面語氣,將 If 省略並把 were 提到主詞前,形成倒裝假設句 Were I...。這種寫法常出現在正式寫作或高分範文中,因為它展現出學生對假設語氣與倒裝句型都掌握純熟,比平鋪直敘的 If I were... 更有文采、更不落俗套。學生在表達「如果我是...,我會...」這種站在他人立場發表看法的題型中(例如看圖作文第二段常要求),都可以套用這個句型,例如:「Were I a tourist at that scenic spot, I would never litter on the ground.」

精準用字/對比結構Proud, because the flowers I have carefully cultivated are admired by so many; heartbroken, because that same beauty is being destroyed by the very people who claim to appreciate it.

此句運用了對比平行結構(parallel structure),用分號連接兩個文法結構相同、情緒相反的子句(Proud, because... / heartbroken, because...),形成強烈的語意對比,凸顯出說話者心情的矛盾與反差。文法上,兩個子句都是「情緒形容詞 + because + 完整子句」的結構,前後呼應、對仗工整,比單純寫「I feel proud and sad.」更有張力、更能展現寫作者的情感層次與組織能力。學生在表達複雜或矛盾的情緒時,可以套用這個「正面情緒, because...; 負面情緒, because...」的句型,例如寫到環保議題時:「Hopeful, because more people are recycling; worried, because the pace of change is still too slow.」

強調句型It is ironic that in the pursuit of a perfect photo, these visitors trample the real beauty in front of them.

這句話運用了 It is + 形容詞 + that 子句的句型,用來強調說話者對這個現象的評價與立場(諷刺、矛盾),是一種常見於高分作文中用來總結或點出主旨的句型。文法上,It 是虛主詞,真正要強調的重點放在 that 子句中,這樣的句型能讓作者的評論聽起來更客觀、更具說服力,而不是單純寫「This is ironic.」這種過於簡短、缺乏細節的句子。學生在作文結尾要下評論或總結看法時,可以善用「It is + 形容詞(ironic/surprising/important) + that + 子句」這個萬用句型,例如:「It is surprising that so few people realize the damage they are causing.」

倒裝強調(Only子句)A single sign cannot protect a garden; only a shared sense of responsibility can.

這句話的後半部分其實是省略重複動詞的倒裝強調句:only a shared sense of responsibility can (protect a garden)。用 only + 名詞片語 + 助動詞 can 的方式來強調「唯有...才能」的概念,並且省略掉重複出現的動詞 protect a garden,使句子更簡潔有力,是學測作文中展現文法高度與用字精簡能力的好例子。比起直接寫「Only a shared sense of responsibility can protect a garden.」,這裡先用對比句(A single sign cannot protect a garden)鋪陳,再用省略動詞的方式收尾,更顯語感老練。學生在做總結、強調某個條件才是解決之道時,可以套用「X cannot do N; only Y can.」這個句型,例如:「Laws alone cannot stop pollution; only genuine awareness can.」

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