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寫給未來自己的一封信

請寫一封信給十年後的自己,內容須包含:(1) 你現在的生活與煩惱,(2) 你希望十年後的自己已經達成的一件事,(3) 你想給未來自己的一句鼓勵的話。

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頂標範文同一題的示範寫法,值得學起來

頂標範文與技術分析

這是同一題的頂標等級範文,標色的地方是值得學起來的進階文法句型或用字。

Dear Future Me, By the time you read this letter, ten whole years will have slipped by, and I wonder what kind of person you have become. Right now, I am a senior buried under mountains of homework, mock exams, and college applications. Not only do I worry about getting into a good university, but I also doubt whether I am talented enough to pursue my dream of becoming a journalist. Had someone told me high school would be this demanding, I might have prepared myself better. Ten years from now, I hope you will have achieved something meaningful: writing an article that genuinely changes the way people think about an issue they once ignored. Whatever challenges you are facing, please remember this—it is not the absence of fear but the courage to keep moving forward despite it that truly defines us. Never give up, future me. With hope and anticipation, Your younger self

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未來完成式 (Future Perfect Tense)ten whole years will have slipped by

未來完成式的結構是 will have + 過去分詞,用來表示「從現在到未來某個時間點之前已經完成的動作」。在這封信中,寫信的時間點是現在,但讀信的時間點是十年後,所以用未來完成式「will have slipped by」來強調從現在到那時,十年已經『流逝完畢』,比單純說『Ten years will pass』更精準地表達時間的完成感,也更符合『寫給未來自己』這種跨時空書信的邏輯。學生在寫類似『未來的某個時間點已經怎樣』的題目時,都可以套用這個句型,例如:By the time I graduate, I will have learned three foreign languages.

Not only...but also 倒裝句Not only do I worry about getting into a good university, but I also doubt whether I am talented enough

當 Not only 放在句首作為強調用法時,後面的子句必須採用部分倒裝,也就是助動詞(如 do/does/did/have/has/will 等)要提到主詞前面,形成『Not only + 助動詞 + 主詞 + 動詞』的結構,後半句則用 but also 承接,恢復正常語序。這種倒裝句在閱卷老師眼中屬於進階句型,比起單純用 and 連接兩個句子(I worry about... and I also doubt...)更能展現句型的多樣性與語氣的強調效果。學生可以在表達『不僅...而且...』的情境時套用,例如:Not only does she study hard, but she also helps her classmates.

假設語氣(與過去事實相反)Had someone told me high school would be this demanding, I might have prepared myself better.

這是 If 子句省略 if、將 had 提到主詞前的倒裝假設語氣,等同於 If someone had told me..., I might have prepared myself better,用來表達『與過去事實相反』的假設,意即『事實上沒有人告訴我,所以我沒有準備好』。這種省略 if 並倒裝的寫法比直接寫 If 子句更簡潔、更顯文法功力,是學測作文中能明顯拉開程度差距的句型之一。學生可以在抒發『早知道...就會...』的情境時套用,例如:Had I studied harder, I would have passed the exam。

強調句型 It is... that...(搭配 not...but 對比)it is not the absence of fear but the courage to keep moving forward despite it that truly defines us

這是『It is + 強調部分 + that + 子句』的分裂句(cleft sentence)結構,用來凸顯句子中最重要的訊息;這裡又進一步結合 not A but B 的對比結構,形成『強調的不是 A,而是 B』的語氣,讓句子更有張力與哲理感,遠比直接說『Courage defines us, not fear』更有文學性與說服力,適合用在信件結尾的勵志金句。學生可以在想要『強調某個重點、製造對比』時套用這個句型,例如:It is not talent but perseverance that leads to success。

精準進階字彙與片語mountains of homework

『mountains of + 不可數名詞』是一種誇飾性的片語用法,字面意思是『一座座的山』,引申為『大量、堆積如山的』,比起單純寫 a lot of homework 或 too much homework,這個片語更生動、更有畫面感,能讓閱卷老師感受到考生的用字能力與寫作風格不落俗套。學生可以廣泛套用在各種『份量很多』的情境,例如:mountains of laundry(一堆待洗衣物)、mountains of paperwork(堆積如山的文書工作),讓作文用字更道地、更有記憶點。

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