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請仔細觀察以下三幅連環圖片的內容,並想像第四幅圖片可能的發展,寫出一個涵蓋連環圖片內容並有完整結局的故事。

四格圖:(1) 一對年輕男女在一場化妝舞會上一見鍾情。(2) 男生晚上拿了把吉他,到那位心儀女孩子住的大樓樓下自彈自唱,一訴衷情。(3) 女孩子沒有出現,但是她的鄰居卻都被吵得從窗子伸出頭來大罵。還有鄰居搞不清楚狀況,滿頭問號。(4) 第四張圖是一個問號,請推測故事的可能發展。四格圖:(1) 一對年輕男女在一場化妝舞會上一見鍾情。(2) 男生晚上拿了把吉他,到那位心儀女孩子住的大樓樓下自彈自唱,一訴衷情。(3) 女孩子沒有出現,但是她的鄰居卻都被吵得從窗子伸出頭來大罵。還有鄰居搞不清楚狀況,滿頭問號。(4) 第四張圖是一個問號,請推測故事的可能發展。四格圖:(1) 一對年輕男女在一場化妝舞會上一見鍾情。(2) 男生晚上拿了把吉他,到那位心儀女孩子住的大樓樓下自彈自唱,一訴衷情。(3) 女孩子沒有出現,但是她的鄰居卻都被吵得從窗子伸出頭來大罵。還有鄰居搞不清楚狀況,滿頭問號。(4) 第四張圖是一個問號,請推測故事的可能發展。四格圖:(1) 一對年輕男女在一場化妝舞會上一見鍾情。(2) 男生晚上拿了把吉他,到那位心儀女孩子住的大樓樓下自彈自唱,一訴衷情。(3) 女孩子沒有出現,但是她的鄰居卻都被吵得從窗子伸出頭來大罵。還有鄰居搞不清楚狀況,滿頭問號。(4) 第四張圖是一個問號,請推測故事的可能發展。

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At a masquerade ball, a young man and a young woman caught sight of each other across the room. Hidden behind their masks, their eyes met, and it was love at first sight. Neither of them, however, had the courage to ask for the other's name before the night ended. Having thought of her all week, the man finally made up his mind to win her heart. One night, guitar in hand, he stood beneath her apartment building and began to serenade her under the moonlit sky, picturing her leaning out with a smile of delight. What he got instead was far from romantic. The girl was nowhere to be seen, but her neighbors were. Woken from their sleep, they leaned out of their windows, hurling curses and whatever objects they could grab at him. One bewildered neighbor, unaware of what was going on, could only scratch his head in confusion. Humiliated yet undeterred, the young man did not give up. The next morning, he returned to the same building, this time not with a guitar but with a handwritten note and a bouquet of flowers, politely asking the doorman to deliver them to her. Touched by his sincerity, the girl finally came downstairs to meet him, and the two exchanged smiles that said more than any song ever could.

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分詞構句Having thought of her all week, the man finally made up his mind to win her heart.

這是「分詞構句」的完成式用法,文法規則是:當兩個子句主詞相同,且前一個動作發生在後一個動作之前時,可以把前面的子句改寫成「Having + p.p.」的形式,省略主詞與連接詞,使句子更精簡流暢。原本平鋪直敘的寫法會是「He had thought of her all week, and he finally made up his mind to win her heart.」,用了兩個完整子句顯得冗長;改成分詞構句後,不僅句子更緊湊,也凸顯出動作的先後順序(先想念、後下定決心),讀起來更有文學感與邏輯層次,是閱卷老師眼中「進階句型」的標配。學生可以在任何需要表達「先做了什麼之後,才…」的情境套用,例如:「Having finished my homework, I went out to play basketball.」

with 複合結構(獨立主格)One night, guitar in hand, he stood beneath her apartment building

這裡用的是「獨立主格」(Absolute Construction)的簡化寫法,省略了 with,直接用「名詞 + 形容詞/副詞片語」來補充說明主詞當下的狀態,等同於「with his guitar in his hand」。這種寫法比起平淡地寫「He held a guitar and stood beneath her apartment building」更精煉、更有畫面感,一個片語就交代了人物的裝備與姿態,是英文寫作中常見的「以簡馭繁」技巧,能讓句子讀起來更道地、更有高手感。學生可以用同樣的句型描寫人物的狀態,例如:「She walked into the room, tears in her eyes, and said nothing.」

強調語氣的倒裝/對比句What he got instead was far from romantic.

這句用「What + 子句」作主詞的名詞子句句型,把原本平鋪的「He didn't get a romantic result.」轉化為更有戲劇張力的句子,並透過「far from + 形容詞」這個精準片語(意思是「一點也不…」)製造語氣上的反差與幽默感,呼應圖片中男主角原本浪漫的期待卻換來鄰居怒罵的落差。比起單純寫「It was not romantic at all.」,這樣的句子更能製造懸念、引導讀者繼續往下讀,是敘事文中常用來轉折劇情的技巧。學生可以套用在任何情節轉折處,例如寫考試結果時:「What awaited her was not the good news she had hoped for.」

分詞構句(被動式)Woken from their sleep, they leaned out of their windows, hurling curses and whatever objects they could grab at him.

此句同時示範了兩種分詞構句:句首的「Woken from their sleep」是被動分詞構句(因為鄰居是「被吵醒」,所以用過去分詞 Woken,而非現在分詞),說明原因;句尾的「hurling curses...」則是主動的現在分詞構句,補充說明鄰居伸出窗外時同時進行的動作。這種「被動分詞開頭+主動分詞收尾」的句子結構一次展現兩種變化,比起用三個簡單句分別描述「他們被吵醒了。他們把頭伸出窗外。他們邊罵邊丟東西。」更緊湊有力,也更符合英文寫作中強調的句子多樣性(sentence variety)。學生可以學習依動作的主被動關係選擇對的分詞形式,例如:「Startled by the noise, the cat jumped off the table, knocking over a vase.」

精準用字與片語Humiliated yet undeterred, the young man did not give up.

這裡用了「過去分詞當形容詞 + yet + 過去分詞當形容詞」的對比結構,Humiliated(感到羞辱的)與 undeterred(不氣餒的)形成語意上的反差,精準地表達出男主角雖然受挫卻仍堅持的心境,比起簡單寫「He was embarrassed but he did not give up.」更凝練、更有文采,用字也更精準到位,展現字彙的深度與掌握情緒轉折的能力。學生可以學習用「分詞形容詞 + yet + 分詞形容詞」來描寫人物複雜或矛盾的心理狀態,例如:「Exhausted yet satisfied, she crossed the finish line.」

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