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新科技產品

以下有兩項即將上市之新科技產品:如果你有機會獲贈其中一項產品,你會選擇哪一項?請以此為主題,寫一篇至少120個單詞的英文作文。文分兩段,第一段說明你的選擇及理由,並舉例說明你將如何使用這項產品。第二段說明你不選擇另一項產品的理由及該項產品可能衍生的問題。

左圖:即將上市之新科技產品ㄧ:隱形披風(invisibility cloak),穿上後頓時隱形,旁人看不到你的存在;同時,隱形披風會保護你,讓你水火不侵。右圖:即將上市之新科技產品二:智慧型眼鏡(smart glasses),具有掃描透視功能,戴上後即能看到障礙物後方的生物;同時能完整紀錄你所經歷過的場景。左圖:即將上市之新科技產品ㄧ:隱形披風(invisibility cloak),穿上後頓時隱形,旁人看不到你的存在;同時,隱形披風會保護你,讓你水火不侵。右圖:即將上市之新科技產品二:智慧型眼鏡(smart glasses),具有掃描透視功能,戴上後即能看到障礙物後方的生物;同時能完整紀錄你所經歷過的場景。

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If I were given the chance to receive one of these two cutting-edge inventions, I would choose the smart glasses without a moment's hesitation. What makes this device so appealing is its scanning function, which allows the wearer to see living creatures hidden behind obstacles, as well as its ability to record every scene the wearer experiences. Imagine hiking through a dense forest: with the smart glasses on, I could detect a bear lurking behind a rock before it ever noticed me, thus avoiding a dangerous encounter. Moreover, I could use the glasses to document precious moments—a sunset over the mountains, a reunion with old friends—so that these memories would never fade with time. Not only would the glasses keep me safe, but they would also turn my everyday life into a permanent, vivid album. As tempting as the invisibility cloak may sound, I would not choose it, mainly because of the ethical problems it might create. Were someone to put on the cloak, becoming utterly invisible to others, there would be little to stop that person from sneaking into private places or even stealing without being caught. Although the cloak also offers protection against fire and water, such a power, once placed in the wrong hands, could easily be abused for selfish or harmful purposes. Given the choice between a tool that helps me perceive the world more fully and one that allows me to disappear from it, I would rather see clearly than hide unseen.

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假設語氣(與現在事實相反)If I were given the chance to receive one of these two cutting-edge inventions, I would choose the smart glasses

這是標準的第二型假設語氣(If + 過去式動詞, S + would + 原形動詞),用來表達「與現在事實相反」或「純粹假想」的情境——因為這兩項產品根本還沒上市,你不可能真的擁有,所以用 were 而非 am,並搭配 would choose,文法上更精確也更道地。比起直接寫「I choose the smart glasses because...」,假設語氣能立刻營造出「這是一個假想情境」的語氣,更貼合題目「如果你有機會獲贈」的設定,也展現你對語氣(mood)的掌握度。學生可以把這個句型套用在任何「如果…會怎樣」的看圖寫作或議論文開頭,例如:If I had a time machine, I would travel back to...

關係子句+附加資訊的精準用字What makes this device so appealing is its scanning function, which allows the wearer to see living creatures hidden behind obstacles, as well as its ability to record every scene the wearer experiences.

這句用了 What 引導的名詞子句當主詞(強調句型的變體,把重點放在「是什麼讓這個裝置吸引人」),再用 which 引導的非限定關係子句補充說明 scanning function 的具體功能,最後用 as well as 平行連接第二項功能(記錄場景)。這種「主詞子句+關係子句+平行結構」的組合比簡單寫「The smart glasses can scan and record. I like it.」豐富許多,能在一句話內把兩項產品功能都講清楚又不顯得零碎。學生可以用「What makes X special is its Y, which + 動詞...」這個模板來介紹任何產品或現象的特色。

分詞構句(現在分詞表結果)I could detect a bear lurking behind a rock before it ever noticed me, thus avoiding a dangerous encounter.

句尾的 thus avoiding a dangerous encounter 是分詞構句,用來表示前面動作所導致的結果,等同於 and thus I would avoid a dangerous encounter,但省略主詞與連接詞後更精簡流暢。這種「主要子句, thus/thereby + V-ing」的寫法在學測作文中很加分,因為它展現你能用從屬結構組織因果關係,而不是用一堆簡單句加 and 硬接。學生可以在任何描述「做了A導致B」的情境套用,例如:She studied every night, thus achieving excellent grades.

假設語氣的倒裝句(Were + 主詞)Were someone to put on the cloak, becoming utterly invisible to others, there would be little to stop that person from sneaking into private places or even stealing without being caught.

這是第二型假設語氣的倒裝形式,原本是 If someone were to put on the cloak...,但將 If 省略、把 Were 提到句首形成倒裝(Were + S + to V),這是較高階、正式的書面英文寫法,常見於學測頂標範文中展現句型多樣性。比起平鋪直敘的 If someone wore the cloak, people couldn't see them,倒裝句不僅語氣更正式有力,也讓評分老師一眼看出你熟悉進階句構。學生可以套用在任何假設情境的句子,例如:Were I to win the lottery, I would travel around the world.

過去分詞片語作條件狀語such a power, once placed in the wrong hands, could easily be abused for selfish or harmful purposes

once placed in the wrong hands 是「once + 過去分詞」省略主詞與 be 動詞的分詞構句(完整版應為 once it is placed in the wrong hands),用來表達「一旦發生某條件」的簡潔寫法。這種省略結構常用於書面語中增加句子的緊湊感與正式度,避免重複主詞顯得累贅。學生在寫議論文或申論因果關係時,可以廣泛套用「once + p.p., S + could/would...」這個句型,例如:Once exposed to social media for too long, students may develop anxiety.

比較結構表達取捨(would rather... than...)I would rather see clearly than hide unseen

would rather + 原形動詞 + than + 原形動詞 是表達「寧願…而不願…」的比較句型,用來總結全文的選擇立場,並與前文的 see(智慧眼鏡的清楚視野)和 hide unseen(隱形披風的隱身特性)做出精巧的呼應與對比,形成首尾扣題的效果。比起直接重複說「I prefer the smart glasses to the invisibility cloak」,這種帶有畫面感、對仗工整的結尾句更有文采,也展現字彙選擇的精準度(see clearly vs. hide unseen 形成語意與音韻上的對比)。學生可以在結論段套用 would rather A than B 的句型來總結自己的立場,例如:I would rather face challenges than avoid them forever。

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